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The Shield is cracking, crumbling, and breaking.
Set before the people to defend them
Not a thing, but a man; his smile faking
Not a hero, but someone to condemn

Condemn to protection of those he loves
Condemn to watch while they find that something
Use him as a tool, to avoid life's shoves
To find the special thing in life, they cling

Beaten down and rendered hopeless, he cries
But then The Light appears and dries his tears
Makes his heart flutter, inspires him to fly
Lifts him up to his feet, and steals his fear

Reminds him his task is noble and good
Shows again he is not alone in pain
The Light is a woman, he understood
A friend who needs him, to him she explains

She helped to patch him up as best she could
Stood him on his feet, put back to the grind
Asked him to stand by her, guard her, he would
He said yes, would not leave her, she did find

But The Shield is not fixed, or even repaired
He stands on last breath, defeated, in pain
Hides it from her, lest she is to despair
Loves her, guides her, hoping it's not in vain
©2009-2010 ~CaptainSammo
:iconcaptainsammo:

Author's Comments

Wrote this today after my girlfriend and I had an understanding break-up. Long conversation about our metaphorical walks of life.

I'm not happy with the situation, but she and I are still very close friends and I don't want to lose that. Maybe, things will turn around in the future.

Written in Iambic (I think?) Pentameter with an ABAB rhyme scheme. There are six four-line stanzas.

Some of the lines read with trochees, and I can't tell if that's just me being silly or if I'm not writing the style properly. Oh well, at least I'm trying.

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:iconkitala:
~whistles~ This came out good though the circumstances for why it was written aren't so...well great.

~hugs~ Hope things get better

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*giggles* I scare little children...and I love it...*grins demonically*

99.8% of anime=obsessed with Naruto. If you are the last few us who can think up 3 better anime post this in your signature
:iconcaptainsammo:
>.> Well, it's usually tragedy that then leads to inspiration... Lol.

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There's something satisfying about shooting something in the face with a rocket. And then watching it melt from the acid that the rocket contained. God. Bless. Borderlands.



They can't break me
As long as I know who I am
:iconkitala:
mmm sometimes :3

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*giggles* I scare little children...and I love it...*grins demonically*

99.8% of anime=obsessed with Naruto. If you are the last few us who can think up 3 better anime post this in your signature
:iconauthortime67:
I too hope things turn around in this situation. In the meantime, I have to say that this is an incredible piece of writing.
:iconcaptainsammo:
Thank you ^^;

Also, on a side note, that was the fastest anything I have ever submitted has been commented/favorited. O.o I was mildly startled.

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There's something satisfying about shooting something in the face with a rocket. And then watching it melt from the acid that the rocket contained. God. Bless. Borderlands.



They can't break me
As long as I know who I am
:iconauthortime67:
You're welcome.
Yeah, I look at the newest deviations. Yours jumped out at me, and I liked it. So I added it to my favorites and commented. :D Haha, sorry for startling. I remember the first time this happened to me too, so I understand that it's kinda shocking.

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